I haven't posted anything about my two fantasy guys in a while, although I'm still playing with them.  This scene drove me crazy, cause I originally wrote it in first person, then my story development shifted while I let it sit on my hd, and so had to re-envision it, but I think I'm at a place where I can move on and tie some of the pieces together. 

I've put it on a blog where I'm moving some of my writing samples:

http://wordssurroundme.blogspot.com/2011/01/one-day-at-fair.html

any comments are welcome.