knittingknots (knittingknots) wrote,

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It's only the 3rd time I've revised this...

(I don't do  revisions of poems often.  But I loved the imagery of this poem, but had not been pleased with the flow.  Will I be now?)

Youkai InuYasha, Version 3

Youkai InuYasha

You stand there, frozen, waiting,
Watching how from terror comes fire,
Watching how from deadly pain
Comes the birth of bloody desire,
Nearly dead, he rises to shred his enemies --
Now what else will he require?

He wears his strength like a shield,
burning hot in the night
wrapped in fine skin and silver hair,
an eldritch sight
otherworldly eyes, red coals
hot with burning light.

Adorned with the presence
Of lightly reigned-in fire,
He sees and smiles,
Red heat-filled desire,
He moves swifter than you think
Blood red warrior laughing, dire.

Sardonic passion dances in his step --
how graceful each motion.
A kiss of hot red death perhaps, a narcotic potion
Bleeds into a a conflagration
Firestorm red smiling at the notion.

Look into those eyes --
This is it.
Bare your throat,
Prepare to bleed.
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