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Poem: Inertia

NOT IK, and although the speaker is I, it's not me of the here and now....could have been me once upon a time, though....


I remember how cold was the air
the day I left you standing there;
the wind was playing with your hair,
your breathing made a cloud.

You looked at me as if you knew
I would not return and nor would you –
I looked deeply in your eyes of blue
I tightened up my scarf.

“I’ll call you soon,” I said and smiled,
You nodded, eyes both sad and mild,
I heard the crying of a child,
when you sighed and turned away.

I meant to call, I meant to write,
When I heard you wed, my throat grew tight,
But I let you slip out of my sight –
Inertia wins again.

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magedelbene
Apr. 27th, 2009 02:13 am (UTC)
Beautifully written!!! It's sad but it's really beautiful! The feelings you poured in it flew out of the simple poem... really touching, leaving you the feeling of wanting to know more about it!

Excellent!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
selinamac
Apr. 27th, 2009 05:25 am (UTC)
I feel it, lady. Very well done.
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  • 8 Sep 2015, 13:40
    Does the story still lives? It's been a while since your last chap :/
  • 1 Sep 2015, 17:29
    Hi knittingknots,
    I hope all is well with you. I see you are not continuing with your story... a wonderful story, and I'll surely miss your updates, they are always a shining spot in my day.…
  • 5 Dec 2014, 02:33
    Wow, congrats!! It's been about that long since I've updated some of my fics, LOL.
  • 22 Nov 2014, 07:37
    You might try Nobunaga Concerto where a modern time traveler exchanges places with Nobunaga. Follows Nobuanaga historically
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    thi was posted on Dokuga 4 days ago
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