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Poem: At Dusk

At Dusk

She watched
as the dusk eased itself
in its red-tinted cloak
touching the paddies ready for planting,
the last stranglers walking among them,
heading for home.

She thought, for a moment,
about those she left behind,
about the girl who kissed her mother goodbye
never to see her again,
then about the amber-eyed man,
waiting for her like she had never left,
ready to lift her up.

She thought about the store
that would stand where she stood now,
and how she used to go there,
laughing with her friends,
not realizing then
how its place in the world would become her retreat,
far from the schoolgirls who would browse its shelves,
here, now, beneath the cedar branches.

Thinking of a fish she watched one day
heading for someplace against the river’s current,
she knew she had gone against the flow,
and some prices had to be paid.
But turning to see the silver haired man coming for her,
hair touched warm by the light of sunset,
eyes so serious and bright,
she knew she had made the right choice.



( 6 comments — Leave a comment )
Oct. 3rd, 2008 01:25 am (UTC)
I know I'm pretty emotional this week... I'm crying over this wonderful and so very touching piece!! You always know how to move me!!

Kagome's insights her inner thoughts and sad musings only to see her 'angel' appear and remind her.. the choice was well worth it.

Now I need to go crawl in a comfy blanket and have a good cry...
Oct. 3rd, 2008 01:46 am (UTC)
Hugs and luffs! sounds like you can use some!
Oct. 3rd, 2008 01:50 am (UTC)
Thanks.. Yah.. I do...
Oct. 3rd, 2008 01:32 am (UTC)
Awwwwwww,so sweet! Of course she made the right choice!
Oct. 3rd, 2008 01:47 am (UTC)
No doubt in my mind!
Oct. 3rd, 2008 03:24 am (UTC)
Wonderful poem. Glad she feels good about her choice.
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