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Poem: Here by the Waters

 Here by the waters,
here by the flowing waters,
here the pale green leaves
of willow wakened by spring
entwine me, binding my heart.

The waters flow on,
never ceasing their singing.
A single leaf lands,
turns once, drifting away
on the clear, sunlit  water.

The withies hold fast,
willow, tree of remembrance,
tree holds my last thoughts
unable to slip away,
bound fast in those yesterdays.

Let me be a leaf
slipping into tomorrow
drifting in sunlight
down the clear rushing water,
not the unmovable tree.

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ladycash
May. 15th, 2008 06:44 pm (UTC)
Very beautiful. I could see the willow branches swaying, and hear the melody of the creek.

Very nice imagery, as always.
knittingknots
May. 15th, 2008 06:47 pm (UTC)
I thank you, ma'am!
landofthekwt
May. 15th, 2008 06:52 pm (UTC)
Beautiful poem. I especially like the parts about it binding here heart and being tree of remembrance which holds her thoughts
knittingknots
May. 15th, 2008 08:45 pm (UTC)
Thanks...willow has a lot of symbolic significance...is the speaker alive, just grieving, or is she a ghost caught in the tree...

I have no ultimate answers.
furousha
May. 15th, 2008 07:06 pm (UTC)
i love 'entwine me, binding my heart'.

you are such a wonderful writer. <3
knittingknots
May. 15th, 2008 08:53 pm (UTC)
If you listen, you can here how the alliteration braids that line...

twine, bind, my

with the assonance:

the N sound

entwine
binding

then it dances at the pause after me, and the concluding sound of heart. Those two words sort of have a slanting alliteration of their own, and contrast with the i-n combinations.

(I don't verbalize it this way when I choose words, but this is how my inner ear thinks of the sounds, a dance of alliteration, assonance and meaning.

Twine and bind, both things you can do with willow branches, but charged with images of the speaker's inertia and identification with the willow.


(Dang, what happened here? I went crazy elaborating on things...LOL. Can you tell I taught English?)

furousha
May. 15th, 2008 09:45 pm (UTC)
lol! i just think they sound beautiful together but the elaboration is nice. :D

and i can definately tell you taught English! :D
knittingknots
May. 15th, 2008 10:25 pm (UTC)
It's fun sometimes to talk about the mechanics of a poem, why this sounds good with that, and how meaning is crammed into such simple words, but it's like Bakalava...too much is just too rich to eat a lot of!

;)
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